What do you think of this?

The end is a little confusing, I don't remember Izzy or Johnny picking up the phone, and where did Zacky come from? Other than those little confusions, your story was very interesting to read, in fact, I was mid-way through it when my mom called me to take out the trash, and I told her 2 minutes, only my mom doesn't listen to that so she gave me another call, very calmly, (when my mom is mad and begins speaking calmly, that is your warning to listen to her), so I quickly ran, and came back to the computer to read the rest of the story, very nice.